Reviews for When We Are Sleeping

starleaf 2008-04-18 ch 1,	abusevery very well done. :) love it, but I just had a problem with the last line. I know you said it was taken from the song, but if i were her i'd be like... ONLY in the evenings? haha.
Fractured Illusion 2007-08-22 ch 1,	abuse"Paul and Daphne were in bed by midnight this evening." This is a very boring way to start your story. The same thing could perhaps be said in a more dramatic way? "ashes of rubbed mascara" Ashes? While I do appreciate the creativity, I don't think the mascara lumps can be described like ashes. Seems too weird. "to her breathing[,] hoping it" "a sorry little thing[,] old and worn[,] with paint " "I don’t think you’ll be getting sleep anytime soon. I am awfully beautiful you know." I love these two lines! :D The last line, I interpret as an almost limiting thing. If you had not explained, I would think that he usually would not appreciate Daphne, but only in the evenings. Anyhow, that's how it sounded to me. Nice piece though! Keep it up!
KayB 2007-04-14 ch 1,	abuseI really liked it; it was sweet. I would normally at least try to give some constructive criticism but it's fine the way it is, so I have nothing.
Aimers 2007-03-11 ch 1,	abuseThank you for this awfully pleasant dose of fluff. :)