If the emotions in this poem were brought out more, it would be touching. The way it is, it just seems kind of cliche - like every other Christian poem out there. If you brought out the emotion of Jesus' suffering on the cross and your gratitude for what he did for you, or whatever other emotions you are trying to draw out... it would be powerful and touching. But the way it is now, it's just kind of blah.

-Jesse

This poems lyrics flow beautifully, and they mean so much! I think I might cry! It's just so beautiful (for lack of a better word)!
Your sister in Christ,
Horse237

That was beautiful... Please keep writing you have a wonderful way with your words. God bless.

-Ivory

I love the topic. The last 9 lines really touched me. Lovely job!