Interesting piece. This is one of the truths that take people a lifetime to realize.

Keep writing!

The strength of this poem is in the alliteration and the random rhymes in the middle of the lines. The first few lines don't seem to make a whole lot of sense but that might be the lack of sleep talking... You really did well with the beautiful words and feel of the poem... but I think it would have been more artistic if you had spent more time on imagery and less time on philosophy. :) Great poem, by the way. I read it twice and loved it both times.

I really enjoy your work. You are young and very gifted and I applaud you for sharing it with us all. May God continue to bless you in using your gifts to glorify Him. Excellent work!

Very intricate, careful language, written in a style befitting the late 1800s. I can't find that much anymore, and it always sounds so pretty! I love the concept. Time is a very difficult subject to tackle, but you did it well.

while this isnt a new and original topic to write about i still like this piece. You're word choice is amazing and while your take on the subject matter is not very different from others you still managed to make it your own. overall good job.

Hey, I like your poem, it flows very nicely :)

I like this a lot. The imagery is excellent and your vocabulary is perfect for this piece. The complex words and the style in which this was written capture and portray time really well! The words you used are flawless. Excellent job and keep writing!