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| Selverwulf 2008-06-19 ch 1,  | abuseAnother powerful poem, it was heartfelt as I read through it. It was really good and I like it, but I think it would make a great impact if you’d break into stanzas. I am so use to seeing a poem broken into stanzas, but that just me ;) This is a dark kind of poem and I think it flowed better without the rhyme. Selverwulf Member of the Reviewers Kingdom |
| Lady DreamWriter 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abuseThere was great imagery here in this piece. You painted a very vivid picture of the dark side that can occur in any relationship. I admire the twisted sense of guilt that you layered throughout this piece. The person in this poem knows that the relationship was toxic and yet he/she can’t help but WANT that person back, because the ‘monster’ has completely warped the other’s self-esteem. It’s interesting how these two are supposedly friends, but the soul scars are still there. Sometimes it’s better to cut the ties that bind, at least until they heal. Hope this review was helpful! Tammy Founder of Reviewers Kingdom |
| Jordan 2007-03-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseits really good. ive read a billion things by you but i still cant believe how good you are. its crazy. im a little scared though.. i dont know what that was about or where it came from. I love you. |
| TheyLied 2007-03-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey, I thought that was pretty damn good. I'm on a plane with my laptop and I'm sure the person next to me is wondering what the hell i'm tearing up about. I liked it. Powerful imagery with few words is definatly a good thing. Plu, the fact it doesn't rhyme almost makes it more real. |
| Emmy 2007-03-13 ch 1, anon. | abusesad poem... >.< but good. |
| Raffy 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseAww, 'tis sad. ::hugs:: But I like it. I hope you're okay. :) |
| the sacred night 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseI think you're better when you don't rhyme. There's a lot more compelling imagery and you show more and tell less in this poem, all of which is good. The part about counting the dots on the ceiling was particularly poignant for me, since it seems particularly desolate. |
| Rhapsody's Shadow 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseMe like, I'm sorry you cryed, if I wasn't uber stressd right now I would cry too. love ya -Rhaps |
| Rach 2007-03-12 ch 1, anon. | abusehmm.. whoa I really like this a lot but I'm not exactly sure what it's about o.o; |
| Love Eternally 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseAw Lain! thats so sad. I'm sorry. It was beautiful though. It' a beautiful poem and keep up the great work. |
| magalina 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abusereally lovely :) |