You could totally make a children's book out of this. Not kidding. Ever read "Goodnight Moon" by Margaret Wise Brown? I think kids would get such a kick out of this. In fact, may I have your permission to read this to the kids at my daycare? (I run one, am not IN one, lol).

heh, that was cute.

Have you seen Rent? reminded me..the title and such...

This had great flow and wonderful rhymes, plus it made me giggle like a schoolgirl.

Haha I love it!! I can't even think what to say... keep it up!!
~Daughter of Music

Great poem! You've even got the rhythm right and it's really, really good.
Great work,

Fantazolic

This would make an excellent children's book.

Haha, I love this. It's really cute. Thanks for the fun read. =)

Very cute. ^^ The rhymes don't sound forced and this piece flowed nicely. Well done!