i wish time could stop for moments like these too. very nice description - enough to structure the idea but fleeting enough to leave the reader wanting more. nice job.

Concise enough to remind me of the memories that dwell in my own head, beautiful enough that I can dwell on them.

Wonderful work.

pretty. i love the imagery. nice work.

Hmm...I love those moments.

♥Christine

Brilliant! well done! I can see it plainly in my head, as though i was there... this poem makes me feel like i was there spiritually

Simple. Straight forward. Descriptive. Good. I like it. My favorite part was "I (we) kept driving." I don't really know why; I just liked it. Very nice work.

this is...cute isn't quite the right word, but almost. very serene. one spelling thing- it says 'loose' in the fourth line when it should be 'lose'. and i'd also recommend getting rid of the 'we' in parenthesis- just put 'i kept driving' or change it to 'we kept driving,' maybe- because it seems to break the flow.

otherwise, something smooth and pretty like this is very refreshing. i like it.

There is an almost nostalgic undertone, I see a picture, in my mind's eye, of the sun rolling across the sky; sunset, sunrise, sunset sunrise... the earth beckoning to it. I love the way you create imagery!

-Anna

I think that smiles are more powerful then what we take for granted.

This piece strikes me as different from your other ones that I have read...perhaps it is the tone or the straightforwardness of emotions. But it is wonderfully refreshing and cheering. Just a small error though: "loose" -> lose.

And I have to agree...the first line is my favorite. Simple and so sweet.
I'm so glad you updated.

I like how the poem already pulls you in with the first line. "He kisses me on a Sunday." Actually, my favorite line. Short but great impact. Great job!

the premis is nice and indie and can be interpreted on many differnt levels. but, unfortuantly, i think that that outlook was quashed somewhat by your bluntness in passages. i don't know. mayabe it's just me. i just wish that some of the emotion in this piece was more eluded to, rather than stated. nice job, though. especially with the formatting.