I really like this story because it rings so true to me. I know a boy just like Jack, and, it's funny because I'm kind of like Amy (it is my name, after all!).

But anywho, I enjoyed reading this. The simplicity was fitting.

This was such a nice story. Even thoguh it doesn't really go anywhere as such, the journey of the thinking process of the mind is so beautifully written. I think this is the best short story I've ever read on fictionpress. Seriously.

You're favourited =)

this is pretty perfect.
i love it (:

I really liked it. The characters just became alive.

This is actually good.
I don't know but you're really good with angsty stories... I just love your style...=)

aw...they're cute..and she's right..there's always the brighter side

this is really good...hope your other work can top this.

It's one of those short stories that can stand by itself (I liked it) but I wouldn't mind if you did add ten more chapters. XD I enjoyed it very much. I think you ended perfectly, and it all works together... *nods* Good job on your first short story. ;)

i love it! its written beautifully and the main character being this brooding dark complex person only for him and u to discover hes not as fucked as he thinks in a short story is awesome :)

i love this story. the main character is so allusive its intriguing and the last line the way it goes back on everything already said its perfect. i am envious that i can't write anything as good as this. well done

what the hell are you talking about? This story is absolutely perfect, I'm glad I clicked on it and took the time to read :). The characters are greatly written, realistic and complex. Not to mention the beautiful ending.
Stories like these remind me why you are one of my favorite writers :)

I think this is reqally good, the characters were developed fine. I like the setting within this.

He shrugged. "You're right. But you should know; this world is fucked."

"The world's beautiful." she said so quietly he almost didn’t hear her. She wouldn’t look at him. "And you're too busy hiding behind that cigarette to see."

->I love this part. :D

Perfect ending. :)

Hello!

You did a good job on this story. The first half seemed to skip around a lot. I had a bit of trouble knowing what was in the present and what was in the past.

Amy was a very minor character, only mentioned a handful of times and yet she was the key to the whole story. You did very well with that!

His perspective change was almost unblievable,stretched a bit too much, but, when I reconsider... he didn't make a 360 turn around, he wasn't instantly "cured" but something in him definately shifted...

You mentioned feeling like the story was incomplete. I was satisfied with it. Your ending line was exquisite! Perfectly melancholy but hopeful and thought provoking!

I liked this story. It's cute :]
There is a better meaning to life though.


Hmm.. so are you going to finish Jacked?