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| a silenced revolution 2007-03-12 ch 1,  | abuseNice work. I think I might suggest putting "that" before the last line: "that my leaving brought". I think perhaps that would be better rhythmically... idk. just a suggestion. Good work. ~Hazellin |
| Orual 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is very interesting just because poets seldom think to apologize. I read all sorts of poems accusing some hurtful party, but very rarely see a poet admit fault. That is impressive. The honest in this poem was refreshing. Good work. |