 Nemonus 2007-03-14 . chapter 1Good. Your words are varied and you give a sense of fantasy, with the terms such as Hilt, and of reality, as in the parts about the bridges. The poem has a good point to it. The characterization of the engineer, done by her description, determination, and at the end, pride, is well done. The rhythm and rhyme is almost perfect. "others cliff sides" ought to be 'others' cliff-sides". Otherwise, fine job. |