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| Twilight Starr 2007-10-24 ch 1,  | abuseGood poem. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| temporality 2007-06-17 ch 1, | abuseThat'd be "soñar" instead of "sueñar" in the last line. The Spanish part is really good (not that the English isn't), and it was just beautiful. I especially like the dialogue bit. Going on my favourites! :) -Cristina |
| Heihana 2007-05-22 ch 1, | abusesueñar is wrong. It's soñar. But other than that, it's pretty good. I've tried writing in spanish but I have utterly failed which is ironic since I speak it and am it and..lalalalala. But yea...I like it. |
| soft-spoken 2007-05-15 ch 1, | abuseVery nice work. I like the the bi-langualness happening! Are you fluent in spanish? Anyway, this was very nice. I liked it a lot. Some how the ending didn't seem to end though, which is, I'm sure, purposeful... so nothing to add on that. I like the words of the mother. Nice. Keep it up, -N |
| poetic abortion 2007-04-11 ch 1, | abuseI fail utterly and completely in Spanish; my own translation of this was only right up to a degree. XD Seriously, I don't care what people say, the Spanish language is difficult. . . . In a totally non-English language way (STILL haven't mastered that). But, yes, onto the actual review! I love the "reflections of old monsters at the window", it really set up a mood and this kid just sitting in bed, waiting for her/his mother to come and tuck him/her in, scared to hell and back by their own imagination. Also, what The Mother said was ingenius; I adore it and, yeah, it sounded pretty in English but in Spanish it sounded too pretty for words. XD Lovely, lovely, lovely. Usually I could care less for a poem set in this style but this called for attention with every single fantastic line. Well done! - Noelle |
| xx-cronopio-xx 2007-04-07 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I do love reading poems in Spanish :) - although, if I'm not much mistaken, "duerman" should be changed to "duermen," since there is no need for the subjunctive or the command in that sentence (it is merely "they sleep"). Also, I learned a new word - cicatriz. Adieu, Kat |