Good poem.

~Twilight Starr~

That'd be "soñar" instead of "sueñar" in the last line. The Spanish part is really good (not that the English isn't), and it was just beautiful. I especially like the dialogue bit.

Going on my favourites! :)
-Cristina

sueñar is wrong.
It's soñar.
But other than that, it's pretty good.
I've tried writing in spanish but
I have utterly failed which is
ironic since I speak it and am it
and..lalalalala.
But yea...I like it.

Very nice work. I like the the bi-langualness happening!
Are you fluent in spanish?

Anyway, this was very nice. I liked it a lot. Some how the ending didn't seem to end though, which is, I'm sure, purposeful... so nothing to add on that.
I like the words of the mother.
Nice.

Keep it up,

-N

I fail utterly and completely in Spanish; my own translation of this was only right up to a degree. XD Seriously, I don't care what people say, the Spanish language is difficult. . . . In a totally non-English language way (STILL haven't mastered that).

But, yes, onto the actual review!

I love the "reflections of old monsters at the window", it really set up a mood and this kid just sitting in bed, waiting for her/his mother to come and tuck him/her in, scared to hell and back by their own imagination.

Also, what The Mother said was ingenius; I adore it and, yeah, it sounded pretty in English but in Spanish it sounded too pretty for words. XD

Lovely, lovely, lovely. Usually I could care less for a poem set in this style but this called for attention with every single fantastic line. Well done!

- Noelle

Interesting. I do love reading poems in Spanish :) - although, if I'm not much mistaken, "duerman" should be changed to "duermen," since there is no need for the subjunctive or the command in that sentence (it is merely "they sleep"). Also, I learned a new word - cicatriz. Adieu, Kat