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| Reakeda 2007-03-13 ch 1,   | "complaining aout religion and life" - about? "offer them something they never felt"- this line is repeated three times and each time I read it was trying to figure out if it was a command or suggestion to "offer them something" or if it was supposed to say you could have "offered them something". Since I'm not sure on which you meant, I hesitated to suggest a correction. Perhaps you could let me know? I tend not apply most grammar rules to poetry as far as capitalization and puncuation go, so I have nothing further to say on that. For the poem overall, it was good. I has an excellent message. Too many christian's are afraid to speak out and because of that so many people never hear the truth. I agree with the poem whole heartedly. Keep writing, and if you can find the time please read and reveiw some of my work. Thank you -Torah Wolfe |