Wow, please tell me when you win the scholarship; this was beautifully/poignantly written!

Oh my God. That was intense and sad and heartbreaking and innocent and wonderful and... I could go on for awhile. Simply heartbreaking. I can't imagine something like this happening. My goodness. Wonderful work. Keep writing! :)

I almost cried.

that is soo sad.

soo what happens to ellen after here??
Ashlyn

You've written this really well, I like your use of words and the emotion throughout the story.

I also like that there were different things happening in all the characters lives; their gay father, Katlyn also being gay, Monet dealing with everything through sport and their mothers secrets.

I'm pretty sad that this is a one shot, and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. =)