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| Aral 2007-10-09 ch 1,  | abuseThis is a very cool concept. I feel like the first line is part of a different story almost. It doesn't seem linked to the conflict. The man vs. nature theme reminded me of the movie Princess Mononoke. Your images were very powerful. I think this would be much stronger if you fleshed out the conflict a bit more. I think it loses some of its urgency and power by being set in the past tense. But this was well done. |
| Talyn Gray 2007-03-13 ch 1, | abuse...crap. I'm up against THIS? O_O anywho--great job. :) I really just love your writing style. I don't really have anything bad to say >_> |