I found your narration style very good. It felt natural and easy to read, plus it revealed a lot about your main character.

I also like your description. Normally, I'd call it excessive, but it really displys his feelings towards her.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

Great story. I like that it was short and sweet. Nice work.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

~Twilight Starr~

Great story! Poor guy.
Please be safe!

this is really good. (x i like how there's a period of time between this and your sequel. :D i feel for the boy, i really do.

Like many of your other stories, this one is amazing! Although it is only a oneshot, it's well written and I love it.

I will definitely be reading the sequel to it!

Aw. This story was so cute. Really, it's one of the best one-shots I've read on this website. Great job :-)

If you want to write a sequel, that's your decision. However, I would not protest. :)

That was awesome! I loved how there was no dialogue, but you can still imagine it being there. It's like in a movie, when there's audio over the scene. That's kind of how it was. Really great story! I couldn't help but feel so bad for the poor guy. Great characters, too. I like that you didn't name them, either. It's cool.

Hm...well, I like a & b. You know if you like to swich between people. But if you don't, b would be my choice.

Whatever floats your boat. :) But I say a sequel from the girl's point of view. Great story!

sequel please. i think it should be the girls POV.

No, I don't think you should do a sequel else it'll loose its effect.

my idea is mixture of a and b with maybe some hints of c. :) my idea is so kinda strange.

YAY!1

I would Love to see a sequel. And I think a girls POV lwould be great.

Reminds me of a predicament I've been in. Sticky. Very well written. Good job!