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| waterlemons 2007-07-14 ch 2,   | Sounds good so far. Maybe include some more details? I don't know, I'm no great writer. By the way, GREAT choice of name (Sophie) ha ha that's my name. So yeah. Very nice. I like stories like this. Otherwise have a great weekend. Better yet, HAPPY SUMMER! |
| hardcoreXbarbie 2007-07-14 ch 1, | i think this is gonna be god :]]. clairey needs to write more. &:O. the first person.. well the one at the top is mean! i think its good. |
| nikkicole 2007-07-12 ch 2, | this story stinks. but good grammar i guess. |
| nemivicious 2007-03-14 ch 2, | It's very promising, but I think you could flesh it out a bit. The prolouge can be short as it is because it grabs the reader's interest, but the first chapter should probably contain more...adjectives? You've got the right basics with giving more information in the first chapter but some more adjectives would do magic. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens though because it seems really promising. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-03-14 ch 2, | It looks like this is going to be a good story. Good luck on your story. I can't wait to see what happens. ~* Twilight Fanasty *~ |