Awesome work. Could make for a very nice song! I like your topic of choice; very realistic.

this is a really cool poem in that the visual eleemnt of the poem adds another characteristic to the poem. Interesting. Keep it up

Andy

/Wow/.
I loved the rhythm, the assonance and rhyming.
And it was PRETTY.
It made my eyes smile.
And an interesting subject.

This was really good. The bold, italicized, and decorative words really added to the piece.

Excellent.