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| Desiree32 2007-05-07 ch 1,   | Ooh, I like this! ^^ I like the descriptions of the feeling of the waves, especially the sentence "like a mother welcoming home her child". It's pretty short but everything is so clear that one doesn't reach the end and think, 'meh, too short'. It's just right! ^^ And I like the bit at the end that tells us why she's feeling that half-yearning to go back to the cottage... Heehee... *first comment cartwheel* |