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Reviews For: Blackout

Adenil 2008-03-16 ch 1,	Wow. Just... wow. This one is incapable of critque. I just really like it, is all. Don't quite no why, but you really spoke of something deep through something shallow. Truly amazing, truly.
Kazuki Mishima 2007-06-30 ch 1,	This poem captured some of the things I love about a blackout. It's yummy.
a silenced revolution 2007-03-29 ch 1,	Wow, I don't think it's trite the way your first reviewer did. In fact, I quite like it. I like the question at the end and the idea of a candle thinking and realizing it's "heading nowhere but its end". That's kind of the way people are I think... oh I'm rambling. Anyway, good work!
tesa131313 2007-03-20 ch 1,	Nice. I like how you are writing about simpler things. Less cliche and more thoughtful things. It's the little things like a candle battling the wind that is beautiful and can be interpreted to something deeper. Like things to ponder about as opposed to trying to make an anthem. You are definately going somewhere and your writing is improving a lot. mUchO sUpEr kUdOs
someone you don't know 2007-03-15 ch 1,	That was so awesome! I really liked the descriptive words and the way you don't reveal what it is until a certain point. Keep writing, I want to read more!
Edgar Wellington 2007-03-15 ch 1,	I see some nice things in this poem, but overall it is trite. I like the "wheezing window," which makes me see the window as something frail, or incapable of doing what it should, which is to provide a view of the outside while keeping the outside elements from coming in. However, it is difficult for me to picture how a "racing wind" would creep from a window. There is a meaning, I suppose, in the "dancing lights" coming from the "friend" and the notion that a candle would have the will to question its own purpose...but I don't quite see it. Your language is pretty good though. You do manage to evoke images well, but I am left a little flat... Keep writing!

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