really beautiful. i love the word choice and set up. And for some odd reason i was thinking about the word 'torn' before i read this and am thrilled that it was your last word. Keep writing!

The words in bold, though they are stark and creative, diminish the words in between and make it too easy for the readers. I think it looks more like a template with the bolded words, and a lot of profound meaning could be gathered just from the language-maybe even punctuation to give it unity, like having semi-colons after each stanza would keep a fluidness to the writing. The stanzas are so nice, and I wouldn't want them to be overshadowed by the bolded words.