|Reviews for winter|
| Lily Laurence 3/15/07 . chapter 1
really beautiful. i love the word choice and set up. And for some odd reason i was thinking about the word 'torn' before i read this and am thrilled that it was your last word. Keep writing!
| The Breakdancing Ninja 3/15/07 . chapter 1
The words in bold, though they are stark and creative, diminish the words in between and make it too easy for the readers. I think it looks more like a template with the bolded words, and a lot of profound meaning could be gathered just from the language-maybe even punctuation to give it unity, like having semi-colons after each stanza would keep a fluidness to the writing. The stanzas are so nice, and I wouldn't want them to be overshadowed by the bolded words.