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| tsarevich alexei 2007-03-15 ch 1,  | abuseI like this a lot. The bleached blonde hair and stars in her eyes descriptions paint a really vivid picture. Somehow I think that having the final part (L.A) on its own line might add a more conclusive feel, but then again maybe it wouldnt look good all alone on its own line. Maybe get a second opinion :P. All in all, great job! |