Couple technical things first: punctuation, this piece needs more, a few commas scattered throughout would really help the flow of this piece (especially in the first five or so lines). Also I would recommend against capitalising the first word of every line, sure it's an old tradition in poetry just not one that meshes with your piece.

Otherwise, it's not a bad piece. Your phrasing is a tad cliched, in particular adjectives like "dark", "little", "barren" but you get your point across.

.:midnight:.