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| sheisdressedinpoetry 2008-05-26 ch 1,   | "and it felt like the BC's, the ABC's, when letters meant everything; when jesus wasnt around." I can't even explain how much i love this concept. You are phenomenal. |
| Cassie 2008-02-27 ch 1, | I always pride myself in my writing, then i read things like this and its like "Cassie your **." haha, very well done. |
| White Tea and Ginger 2007-09-28 ch 1, | you're just genius. i'm so jealous. my writing sucks right now. |
| bangbangstartagain 2007-08-27 ch 1, | whoa. so mindblowing. those last lines... + favourites. |
| spiked punch after midnight 2007-06-23 ch 1, | this is just brilliant. I saw that someone else said this, but it's true; this really reminds me of alice and wonderland. brilliant images. I fell in love with nearly every single word. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-05-29 ch 1, | Somehow I thought that I'd reviewed all your recent works, and wow was I mistaken. The sound in this OVERWHELMES me. "the sun did explode-into neat daisy rows", is the most unique off rhyme that I've read in awhile. I like how this is specific, and evocatory, if that is a word, at the same time. It brings the picture into focus, but lets the reader expand out from that vision. The repetition of "she" really keeps this grounded in the individual, and the individuals place in the scene. I haven't been able to read or write much lately, but this cheered me up. Thanks, this was marvelous. Hope all is well with you. MD:77. |
| t-t-t-ouch. 2007-05-07 ch 1, | All I can really say is wow. I dont really have words to explain the feeling I get from this poem, but i really LOVE it. I like how you say that the sun explodes when she hits bottom. Yet another marverlous work. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2007-04-23 ch 1, | this poem seems very childlike with all the images yet it's rather grotesque, too (in a good way...the images are very strong). it makes me think of alice in wonderland, but not the disney version, it's definitely more like lewis carroll's rather bizarre tale of another world. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2007-04-17 ch 1, | Ah love the imagery with the little insertions about life such as "when jesus wasn't around" - truly gives insight into your thoughts. |
| diffident 2007-04-16 ch 1, | sometimes I just don't get your poetry.. it seems like all pretty pictures, but nothing beneath. but, pretty images still. i enjoyed it, even if i can't make any sense out of it. marie |
| sin olvido 2007-04-16 ch 1, | Wow, great imagery! I can't even describe what I though about this other than highly impressed. ~Cristina |
| mizu no kokoro 2007-04-13 ch 1, | like a person pushed off the edge, driven insane by life. the imagery was impressive. excellent. keep writing |
| thursdays and rain 2007-04-09 ch 1, | sighs and smiles |
| water lily nymph 2007-04-05 ch 1, | haha, what a silly piece but quite interesting at that. the description of the yellow sunflowers and the red plastic shoes remind me a little of OZ. the most interesting line to me was "as the clouds pushed her down' - it makes for an interesting visual. ♥ |
| EnigmaticArsenic 2007-04-03 ch 1, | lol. i found this really humorous. the plastic red shoes reminiscent of dorothy. it's kinda like what i'm always hoping to avoid. |