aw. The story has end? *sighh* FYI, i know that you probably know this already but i still have to say it, I LOVE THIS STORY! It's just AMAZING. woah. I love stories where main characters have a love/hate relationship and this story is exactly what it is. :D

woahh! this chapter was 'ouch'! I feel really really bad for Carrie. I couldn't believe that she actually heard all of this. OMIGOSH! It's getting more and more interesting in every chapter. :D Btw, i decided to comment on your story since this is the 'heart-breaking' chapter. This fiction is greatt!! Write more of a story like this please. :)

THIS WAS SO FREAKIN AWESOME :D I feel stupid it took me 2 minutes of staring at the screen before i realized where the title came from :D I loved it!

This is a really sweet story!

"...You work in a place with many sharp knives, Carrie. I do not want your blood to get on my floor. Do you understand?”
LOL I love it.

wow my fish committed suicide the EXACT same way! HAHAHA... yes it was shocking

aah i love ella enchanted too!
:D

I'm a little bit crazy about this story. Lol...no seriously, it's too good!

Keep it up!

Ri

ok. so first of all, the whole... summary is just plain stupid.
i only clicked on this story cuz it sounded stupid/funny in a way. but no. it's
so elementary, it's frustrating. it's only been the first chapter, but let me tell you. first impressions do count. and what i read from the summary... turn off. but i decided to check it out anyway. sure, it could get better in the later chapters, but i'd really rather read something that grabs my attention from the start.

so let me point out some annoying mistakes
1. it's pretty sad how she's depressed over a goldfish. and the
whole "Calvin & Hobbes" goldfish naming thing.. uhh. ok.. pretty
stupid. [not a mistake, just pointing out]
2. "I saw it wasn’t just any costumer – it was a cute guy customer."

how elementary can you get? i'm sure it would've worked if you used another wording. but "cute guy customer". wow. sounds like 3rd grade to me.
3. "Some guy had just hit on me. I totally didn’t get why guys felt the need to hit on me... I had only been hit on once before in my life..."

okay. your second sentence pretty much IMPLIES that she gets hit on my guys.. quite often. but then the last sentence of that paragraph, it says she's been hit on only once in her life. um. okay. that may be overlooked by others, but really. to some people-like me- who WANT to read a GOOD or at least DECENT story that flows well and has an interesting enough plot/concept/character description... it hits a nerve.
4. "I knew there was some wrong with me when I realized that the one guy who had ever really hit on me turned out to be an evil spy from Pizza Hut who was only buttering me up so I wouldn’t suspect his true nature."

let me repeat: "I realized that the one guy who had ever really hit on me".
didn't you just say that she was hit on before? well, AT LEAST "ONCE", right? gosh. this is ** me off. you totally need to re-edit this. i suggest rewrite.
oh. an "evil spy from Pizza Hut"? how much more elementary can you get?! that's the lamest thing i've ever heard. sure, it happens in real life. but really, it's not that interesting to read about. 'cuz we ALL know where this story's heading.
she somehow re-encounters that "evil" Pizza Hut spy and of course, this guy is gonna be some cocky jerk who she can't stand. but eventually, they're gonna start to get used to each other, throw in a few pizza orders here and there, and then the start to form something called a relationship.


definitely not worth my time. sorry.

This story was amazing! :D I loved it!

XD my dad became depressed when his pet fish died. He even buried the fish . -_-
And I like this already. Owo

Aw. So cute. I managed to finish reading this in like a couple hours. Good job. ;)

aw so sweet! =)

Aw, that was adorable! Loved it. Great plot and well written. Besides, any story with a guy names Seth in them are usually amazing. :D

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

Aww this story is cute :P