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| fatbird33 2008-03-19 ch 1,  | abusethis is great. it's funnt yet insanely insightful. i especially liked the "a bird in the ocean is not exotic, just out of place" genius |
| Definition 2007-07-04 ch 1, | abuseWow. Beautiful. Just beautiful. It has a slight tint of humor in it, and I like that. Definite fav? You bet. |
| Maranwe Telrunya 2007-06-11 ch 1, | abuseOh my. That is absolutely hilarious. lol. "It seemed like a good idea at the time." You have me laughing now. and I can't stop the silly giggles. |
| nina know nothing 2007-06-09 ch 1, | abusehah! i adore this poem, i love how it reads as if a friend was telling a story. plus i ACTUALLY laughed at the end. |
| bittersweet.season 2007-05-28 ch 1, | abusethe last three lines were p e r f e c t. |
| in a jar pk 2007-05-08 ch 1, | abuseabsolutely gorgeous. absolutely. x |
| emergency goose situation 2007-04-24 ch 1, | abuse"and now i'm naked and there's water in my ears." ohgodohgodohgod, for some reason that line made me feel like my head was exploding. In the good way. This is pure whimsy and I love you for it. |
| Lana Mira Beth 2007-04-15 ch 1, | abuseLovely metaphors all the way through. I liked that mixed with the humourously sad ending. Well done.!:) |
| the twilight here 2007-04-03 ch 1, | abusestrangely beautiful. i love it. |
| calybe 2007-04-02 ch 1, | abuseLovely metaphor, and there's something about the ending that is so fitting. It's like a person rushing to explain their mistakes. |
| Genevieve Straessley 2007-03-22 ch 1, | abuseI'm not sure I like the beginning of this poem. It's a shallow introduction with a deep final message. Love the overall tone and the last line, but it could use a stronger intro. |
| multiples of six 2007-03-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow.. this makes me sad. It just feels like it could actually happen. I like the metaphor, though.. |
| Edgar Wellington 2007-03-19 ch 1, | abuseHa! Maybe try tights and cape next time. |
| elasticbobaturtle 2007-03-18 ch 1, | abusewow, what a cold perception told in so many vivid images. I love the cynicism in it, it carries the story through. |