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| Moondog Dozier 2007-03-20 ch 1,   | Very vivid emotional and personal connection. The reader can feel the emotional resonance after, "I overheard your-loneliness", this makes it all the more relatable. Very well thought out. Good work. |
| Basara 2007-03-19 ch 1, | sad... nice... |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-03-19 ch 1, | Oh, that is pretty. I love the bit in parentheses. That's just gorgeous. I love the saying "be alone together," because it's so pardoxical. Nice work. Keep writing! :) |
| she smolders 2007-03-18 ch 1, | The ending of this is so sweet and gives me hope. People need to know that they don't have to be lonely. You paint a beautiful picture with this poem. Take care. |