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| lordelfy 2007-10-20 ch 1, | this is really good, but i think it ended kind of fast. I thought there was more to it and scrolled down more and there was nothing more. You could probably expand on this a little bit but i do like it already! Very nicely written and something that everyone can interpret their own way |
| mindOFdeliriousUNREST 2007-04-04 ch 1, | aw, so sad! *tear, tear* i like it alot, though i would suggest a little more "figurative writing" as my teacher calls it. paz, -the delirious one |
| morethancarbon 2007-03-18 ch 1, | Ah, my dear. How true. I would suggest maybe a metaphor or two? After a couple of lines it doesn't flow very well... |
| Ellerfru 2007-03-18 ch 1, | sad... good poem |