this is really good, but i think it ended kind of fast. I thought there was more to it and scrolled down more and there was nothing more. You could probably expand on this a little bit but i do like it already! Very nicely written and something that everyone can interpret their own way

aw, so sad! *tear, tear* i like it alot, though i would suggest a little more "figurative writing" as my teacher calls it.
paz,
-the delirious one

Ah, my dear. How true.

I would suggest maybe a metaphor or two?

After a couple of lines it doesn't flow very well...

sad... good poem