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| rathina 2008-03-07 ch 3,  | i love this story! |
| A Different Kind of Yellow 2007-09-11 ch 6,  | well come on then, loving this one too :D |
| Dreamless_Infinity 2007-08-28 ch 1, | The first line is a little…cliché. If you take out the ‘change my life forever’ part, it might work better. In the first paragraph you have ‘snapping me out of my daze’. What daze? You only say that she’s passing cars. Maybe you could have her daydream about how fast they go since she’s a racer? I don’t know… It seems so surreal, although I guess there isn’t much you could do about that, but having Trent and Conner pretend she’s their girlfriend is weird. You might want to have Trent escort her out. Other than that, this seems like a really good start. I read High School Drama, but since it only goes up to Chapter 6, decided to check out your other stories. ~Dreamless~ |
| Michelle Richard 2007-08-27 ch 6, | I liked the story when I first started reading it but I'm looking forward to a re-write. Let me know when you have posted the re-write. I can't wait to read more. |
| clair-a-net 2007-08-25 ch 6, | sounds good to me though i like the style as is, which means its going to get even better |
| Nightlove 2007-08-25 ch 6, | this story is amazing! i cant imagine your writing being better, cause your amazing. dont give up on any of your stories, cause i'll always be here waiting to read your next one. and i doubt that i'll be the only wating. |
| MelGrl 2007-08-25 ch 6, | Please update soon! |
| black ennui 2007-05-22 ch 5, | i'm pretty sad to see that she and conner won't give a relationship a shot... but do i see something brewing between her and tre? but allie likes him! i'll just hafta read to find out. :) keep updating! |
| LiL PiNk 9o 2007-05-18 ch 5, | so i totally think that ally and jason would be cute together are you gonna do that oh let me guess "i will just have to wait and see right" *sigh* oh well so am really liking this yep LP |
| TopazEyes1992 2007-05-18 ch 5, | I totally love where this story is going. Unfortunately, I didn't read it the first time. It might have been great for all I know. Well, keep it up! |
| A-through-Z 2007-05-18 ch 1, | Hey, I really like your story so far. Maybe one thing though, not to be mean, it maybe seemed a little rushed. she started out not liking them at all and then at the end of the chapter she was kissing him. Maybe it's just me. Please, don't take this in a negative way! Great story so far though, on to the next chapter! |
| emotionless-stares 2007-05-18 ch 1, | wow..the guys are pretty cool |
| clair-a-net 2007-05-18 ch 5, | good stuff. Well glad that matt character is out of the way. Why is tre so cold. You know he like her, but doesnt say anything, where as conner is just the opposite. can wait to here abotu the race. hope she wins. |
| Gracefully Clumsy 2007-05-18 ch 5, | lol Trent cracks me up! Dani and Tre are so cute with the "fighting cause we won't admit we like each other" thing- haha been there. I got excited when you updated cause I was checking back a lot these past couple of weeks, and I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter! -Tori |
| LiL PiNk 9o 2007-05-17 ch 4, | so this is really good i am enjoying it it is very different from any other story i have read please don't take so long to update again LP |