There is a sort of biterness behind this story that makes me want to cry, but I love it. You are an amazing writer and I honestly believe you are the best writer on here.

I laughed when Billy made his challenge. Overall, it really feels like an old fable.

Wow that now leaves a nice impact. I really liked this story. It definitely had a few morals you could take from it. And the fact that it was written very simply, actually makes it sound more like a faerytale. I give mad props, and I almost want to know how his life went on after the end.
~EmotionsHaveNoBrains.
By the way I really hope you get published so that I can properly buy your books and have them on my shelves. It is too sad how hard it is for good writers to get published and how easily horrible ones do.

Very well done, and a fitting end. The only thing left unclear to me was just how intelligent Billy was... because obviously he was smarter than the rest of the village (he knew Peter could not turn away the sun) but at the same time, I wonder if he realized it would make Peter blind (therefore truly and permanently ruining him.

Anyhow, thank you!

I'm a little sad for Peter, but I still think this is a great story. Peter's ending was fitting.

Wow this story was really good keep up the good work.

I loved the way this was written. The only thing I would suggest would make the theme or the moral a bit more obvious. I'm not even sure I understand it yet. But it was gorgeously written.

Aww. Sadness, Miss Lani! Quite well done for a fairy tale all your own, however.