 AluminumMuse 2007-06-05 . chapter 1Good, though I sense that you were struggling to write about so many characters at the same time (if not, it just came out sounding that way). For some help with this, read Scott Westerfeld's 'The Last Days,' or keytoexistance's 'Translation League,' the second being right her on fictionpress!
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 TalesOfOld 2007-04-02 . chapter 2Yay, the story continues! Hmm, I wonder which guy Alex likes, and vice versa. I thought it was Tristan but now...hmm, curled up next to Finn. This is bound to get interesting.
Have you ever considered making a prequel to this about how they became rock stars? Usually such a thing would be great story material and it seems a little odd that they're already famous in book 1. Just a thought. :)
Keep writing and update soon, please!
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 TalesOfOld 2007-03-29 . chapter 1Hehehe, I like it! It's cool how you gave each person a very unique personality...I get SO tired of reading about a group of friends and they all act alike.
Hmm, and good job with making Tristan serious dream material! Maybe some of it's that I've always adored the name Tristan, but the rest of him doesn't disappoint. *drools*
The only thing that I noticed that you might consider changing is where the narrative stops in order to compare the bedrooms. They do a good job of saying a lot about their personalities, but maybe the description of Alex and Danielle's room would be better during the scene when Alex is in her room?
Update soon and keep writing!
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