oh wow the ending was unexpected. strong emotion and great descriptions. a good piece.

oh wow, it felt like a train hit me at the very end when i got it.

so, so haunting but so, so wonderfully written.

i really like this. words can't describe but great job. and thank you for your review =)

Great. I like how you liked two very opposite things into one. Brilliantly done.

oh gosh whoah this poem is smart.
Brilliant.
Amazing job.
~Sara.

i was reading this and was like "what is this leading too" but i see the importants. bravo. you captured innocence and maturity all in one.

i think it is very descriptive.(bad speller sorry) i like it. the poem was surprising at the end it wasn't the ending i was thinking of. you could go back and even make it a short story. it would be a good one.

The emotion is so heartbreaking but so beautiful at the same time. You worded this piece nicely. Well done!
Thanks for the review!

oh I really like this. Really sad, but definitely shows how we can relate something beautiful to something miserable. Great job!!

Portrays the nuances of moving on extremely well. Good job.

I liked this, it's sad yet beautiful. Very good!


Thnx for the review too!

Wow...depressing, but I like it a lot.
I think it needs something, though--
I'm not sure if "reflect" is the right word there... I'd go for "match" or "reminiscence" or something... Just cause when it says reflect, I see a really shiny coffin that the skirt is reflected in-- like obscenely glossed wood that works as a mirror...
Anyways, just ideas...

Cheers!