this is a truly fantasitc piece of poetry! I'm really glad i stumbled across this. Your rhyme scheme is interesting and the point is totally in your face. i loved this poem! this will definitly go on my favorite stories list!

i love the rhyming scheme. it made my day, because deep down i know i'm in love with rhyming poems, it's just a denial thing.

i love the last line, this flows abstractively, and i like it alot.

i like this. and i dont usually enjoy rhyming poetry. but this was blunt and beautiful and i loved it.

very intense, but the lack of punctation made it more so. nice work.

"stab me to pieces and
say goodbye because
a promise not worth keeping is
as good as a lie"

I don't think I have ever heard this before, but such a great point.
I love it.

The only thing is the translation from the line
"and now i regret"
to
"stab me to pieces and"
seems a bit awkward. In general this was an amazing poem, just that one line. It doest ruin the poem at all, though. Which is hard to do.

Borgeous. Spectacular. Phenomenal. I love it all. I can't pick a fovorite line because they're all my favorite. Maybe one of my favorite poems I have ever read in my life. Thank you for posting it!