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| C.Sabbadin 2007-07-11 ch 1, | abuseI think you should have gone into more detail on their meeting. It would help round out the story. It was an interesting prologue and I liked how you addressed them all separately first as individuals. |
| Noihseret 2007-03-21 ch 1, | abusewhat an interesting story! I can't say I've ever read one quite like this. talk about holding my interest through out the whole chapter. I couldn't drag my eyes away from the screen! I'll be waiting for chapter 2! |
| CardboardCreative 2007-03-21 ch 1, | abuseCan't wait for some dialogue ;D UPDATE! |