Though this wasn't as humorous as the first one, I thought it was very nice in its own way of angst that you wrote it in. The emotion in it- Which I'm always looking for, was very nice. Sometimes I thought the lyrics to the song abruptly ended the way the story was narrarating and stole the emotion out of it, it was very entertaining.

C.S.

Wow. This was deep. It's one of those stories that a lot of people can relate and it kind of makes them want to cry because the realization of it all is almost too much to handle. It's really well written and the song fits perfectly with it. It all flows in just the right way. It's full of feeling too so you can see where this not named girl comes from. Good job.

I love the style of your writing. This was a great story, one that I can really relate to in parts of. You've always had a way of keeping your writing realistic. That's a great thing to be able to do.