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| RoseLife 2007-09-25 ch 7,   | i loved it! it was awsome! but if Danny just got stabbed in the leg, how can he run that fast? lol haha but it was so awsome! great work!! XD ~RL~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 7, | They act just a little too calmly to the fact they just murdered people. Danny (unless he is also an assasin) should have been freaked out at least a little bit even if he does have a calm, cool, and collected personality. It's murder. Sam freaked out the first time she murdered someone. Why wouldn't she freak out because she murdered the guy who basically raised her and held her prisoner? At least she could have shown greater relief to the fact she had her freedom. Okay chapter. Looking forward to seeing an update. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 6, | Nice cliffhanger. She didn't really kill him, right? That would be horrible. Looking forward to an update. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 5, | Good chapter. You could spend a bit more time on characterization. It would make the story better. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 4, | Good chapter. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 3, | Interesting chapter. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 2, | Great chapter. Nice cliffhanger. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-06 ch 1, | Good start. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-08-07 ch 4, | Sweet. No other words can describe my reaction. I reallyhope Danny gets killed... |
| franklin j l more 2007-06-15 ch 1, | it was pretty good. i lust wanted a long ch. the way it was written was awesome. |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-04-12 ch 3, | Better, but its falling into predictability. You really should've held off on that 'Daniel' part untill after that last Sam section. As for this Daniel character, well... I think its fairly obvious he has feelings for Sam. But I could be wrong, this IS only speculation. Regardless, I hope something new and exciting happens soon. |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-04-10 ch 2, | Nice try for suspense, but I'm just not feeling it. I really don't care what happens next. I want to, but your writing just doesn't allow it. Typos and errors kill the story. |
| saveeta 2007-03-27 ch 1, | post the other chapters...i know u have them =D |
| JerseySpirit 2007-03-20 ch 1, | OMG i luv this story! update soon! |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-03-20 ch 1, | Not bad... but not very good, either. I suppose that's forgivable, considering that its only the first chapter, but still... And one more thing: Just how old is Samantha, anyway? I assume around third-grade, due to that prologue, and the fact that the chapter is set 'ten years ago' but I figured it best to ask. As far as your rating goes, for now, A THREE out of SEVEN. Below average, but have hope! I know it will get better. |