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Me, myself and Ducky 2007-04-26 ch 1,	PLease update soon! I can't wait till your next update! Cya
Callitha 2007-03-20 ch 1,	Good idea. Just a few things to think about: Show, don't tell. Dont tell us she just moved in by herself, let the boxes littering her apartment say so themselves. Let us hear her mother on the phone and just show her physical reactions perhaps. Now that you've written everything that's going on behind the scene, you can edit some of it out and focus more on the physical. I suggest cutting the first two paragraphs completely and finding other ways to let us figure that information out. She needs a Catalyst for the world hopping. Even if it isn't apparent to the reader or main character right away, there should be some hint of why it was at that particular time and place that she gets transported. Did she pick up an unusual object at a street fair or garage sale? Does she look out the window at a planet or unusual lining up of planets and stars? Does she see shadows moving? Some sort of unique hint will intrigue the reader as to why this is happening. I can't wait to hear more about this guy in the other world and figure out more about the main character's personality. I'll be reading more when you get it updated. :)
Free the dancing Llamas 2007-03-20 ch 1,	Oh this sounds so promising and good! Please update as soon as possible! Awesome story!