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| Cracknaddicker 2007-03-20 ch 1,   | Nice rhythm, but like, how you keep repeating "the end is still unclear," i might like, do every other line of that as something that rhymed with it, rahter than just keep repeating that same line four times. um. . . .yeah. |
| l337 r0cX3r 2007-03-20 ch 1, | Very interesting... I like the rhythm a lot, and how it flows... Its very good. |