I knew it was a gun when I read that passage, but I never thought he would *really* kill himself. I'm also very surprised that you didn't make Riley say he loved him at his tombstone.

The sad thing about this story is that, in real life, it *is* a cliche. It may not be in the happy universe of ficitonpress romances, but in real life, this story has happened so many times. Its sad, and true.

I'm a Christian gay supporter, and I just want to add my two cents on the religious bit. My parent's don't support gay rights, so I grew up not supporting them. Until a few years ago, when I started to grow a brain, I was strongly opposed to gay marriage. Then, I realized, shouldn't God support any type of love, as long as its pure? This is a touchy, issue, and I love the way you dealt with it. Bravo!

wow..its depressed...its intense and also mind blowing..i hate suicide and even hate unrequited love..especially if the love is in same sex..cause you love whoever you love,right..

but i kinda love it..its like a bittersweet story for me..cause i know Riley is a great friend..but he just cant love him the way that he wants..and when i read the ending, its just seems that the way Riley feel all the time..he will come back if he calls again but he didnt..

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ok im getting depressed now..its cause im reading it in the morning, and its kinda make it more depressing,no?..nevermind..love it anyway..like i said its kinda bittersweet i hate it but when i read it again i guess i love it the same..

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I'm having a little sob session now, but as far as the story goes, it was great, I just wished it would've stay cliche and they ended up together.

Anyways nice job.

Oh, my God...I'm, like, seriously crying. I feel really pathetic, but that was so good! I kept thinking, Riley, goddamnit, kiss back already! That would have been perfect...but no he was in love with the total slut...GAH!

As a Catholic gay-supporter, I really loved it, because even though I believe God supports any kind of love (sorry if this is getting ultra-religious), I liked the conflict that what's-his-face was feeling between the way he was raised and the way he felt.

Geez, I bawled my frickin' eyes out after reading this[[way too sensitive for my own good]].

Beautiful, honestly. I love the ending and just this story in general. Amazingly written in how the words are powerful[well, in my thoughts].

peaace. x]

Aw T_T I love reading angst from time to time _

I really enjoyed your story... Im glad you made it believeable, and althought simplistic, it was well written. The foreshadowing was well placed in the story, you had to pay attention.

From a young gay "catholic" it makes quite a bit of sense...

hope you write more of these,

a fan,

-UpturnèdCross-

Oh, my God! This was so sad! I am so gonna explode in tears. This was amazing and really cute!

Maybe because I'm very tired, but this story made me start to tear, (you know that catch in the throat just before you cry, that you hold back). Yes the suicide was cliche, but the emotion in the story pulled it off. A very sad ending.

Also good use of repetition, defined characters, and language. The situations are cliched but realisitc. It's not perfect, but it's certainly good. (I don't usually tear at movies and books, (unless they're really are involving and sad))

That's so sad! I pretty much starting crying, okay not bawling my eyes out, but still tears were forming...I was hoping they would get together, but I noticed the genre: tragedy. So I guess I walked into this one, didn't I? lol. I loved it though, and it was greatly written. Can we assume that Riley loved him back?

Great job!

Mia

This story just ripped out my heart and threw it into the mouth of an active volcanoe.

All I have to say is that this was intense. Powerful. Evocative. So many other wonderful words... It was -perfect-.

Fantastic job.

Aw, that's sad! Really sad, made me tear up. I'm not sure if it's really cliche though. You're right, cliche would be them getting together and I was sort of expecting that. But I guess in a way, him killing himself would be a cliche of a different kind. Eh, whatever. I'm getting a headache thinking about it. Point is, it's wonderful. I love it. Great job.

Kinda saw it coming, but it was still quite sad. Really good, though it could have been turned into an awefully awesome tragic romance, full length and not a one shot. The style was a bit simplistic, but it worked for this patucular story.

Keep writing and I'll keep reading.

Sadie

are you trying to make me cry?

Where is the 'this will make you cry' warning? I DONT SEE IT!

Voodoo Child by the rogue traders is so not the right song to listen to while reading this.

out of interest, did you ever name the main character? if so what was the name? i'm just wondering. or was he nameless. if so, what did you refer to him as in your head while writing this?

wah, i need to calm down, you've made me hysterical!

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So I'm generally a fan of cliche, which is why the end of your story wasn't predictable to me at all. I wanted them to fall in love. I hate when they don't fall in love in the end.

This was absolutely wonderful though. A little extreme with him killing himself...but more real than the both of them just happening to be gay and falling in love.

Marvelous.