i love how you wrote this - it is so full of emotion! excellent job!

This poem almost sounds like you are outside, looking in at yourself, though I guess you aren't. It's really, really good. Like whoah. xD
~sara.

ha- i wrote a poem entitled diet coke, also. so this is interesting.

i like the pure anger, its like you strip trhough everything else and are just pure mad- then realize your supposed to be mature. the words are amazing, also

i like the way you made breathe. i don't understand the line nails though hair...other wise it is awesome.

Thought that was very good - it reminded me of a poem Gilian Clarke (I think)