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| Nirnaeth Arnoediad 2007-04-03 ch 1,   | An interesting read. The imagery is nice, and I like the way you set up the ending, but a beta-reader or a few more edits would probably help you with stuff a spell-checker doesn't catch. For example, over head in the first sentence is more correct as overhead, and I'm fairly sure monstrous caves should be waves. It always helps me to let something sit for a day or so and go back and edit it then so that I get the idea of what it's supposed to sound like out of my head and can read what's really there. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. |
| Lana Mira Beth 2007-03-22 ch 1, | O sad. I like this story a lot. Dark, pretty, short.:) It works well. Nice work.:) |