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| spiderfly 2007-03-21 ch 1,   | I love this - the title I find so intriguing. I love the imagery of the 'deaf children humming' - it brings such surreal emotions to the reader. I like the random capitalisations for emphasis, and the topic is really captivating. What I found odd was how the hill was 'unimportant'. It just didn't seem like the right adjective. But I do love this poem, I'm only grabbing at straws here for some con~crit! Well done! :] |
| Embellished Heart 2007-03-21 ch 1, | Written with intent and very good. :) Reminds me of a dream...it has a dreamy like quality to it...like a staory or something...or am I just babbling? lol |