Hmhm.. I love your writing. :P They pwn, sorry you haven't been getting alot of reviews. I'll change that though. Nice and Intense, keep it up.

I love a lot of your wording.To point out my favorites--

"It’s like being kissed conscious," was definitely one.

"Would you capture this hand of mine,

Made solely of bones and frost?"
-- most definitely another, and the brush your palm against my face vs. kick me back in line part was like warm air and cold air clashing together to make a flash of stunning lightning.