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Emily Brooke 2008-07-27 ch 9,	Hey there! I just read all nine of your chapters! I have to say I love the plot and the characters! Very original! I'll put this on my alert list! I'm looking forward to your next update! -Emily
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 9,	I LOVE THIS :D update soon!
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 8,	“You are not fat, and no one has seen Helena in years. You might want to be prepared for some jokes though.” Sebastian seemed to suddenly remember something, as he finished tying the corset. omg he loves her! hahahaha :) i love this
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 7,	ooh, i like the plan! paul's going down! :D great story
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 6,	pretty short but still great ! love it !
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 5,	oh she could so get Sebastian if she wanted! hehe love this!
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 4,	hehe i love the dog :) this is incredible!
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 3,	haha i decided to be helpful and review all the chapters after reading them, because honestly this story deserves WAY more reviews than it has, seriously it's incredible! I love it!
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-25 ch 2,	omg paul is SUCH a jerk!! this is great :D
She Had Somewhere To Go. 2008-07-24 ch 1,	Incredible so far ! I'm surprised there aren't more reviews, this is great !
Night-Rayne 2008-07-23 ch 9,	Heh, wow I really like this story, its kinda funny
Caecilia Bellz 2008-07-19 ch 6,	Where Helena ran away, is it supposed to be Vegas? If so, then you need to go over this chappy. I adore the writing but the small mistakes are kind of annoying. Just go over each chap, then they'll be even better! Oh, Sebastian seems like an amazing person! I wish I knew someone like him. He sometimes seems a bit too perfect though... Other than the fact that he hired a "prostitute" to pretend to be his sister. Good thing that balances out though, because an absolutely perfect character kinda gets on people's nerves. I really love the writing though, sorry if it seems like I don't!
Caecilia Bellz 2008-07-19 ch 5,	“Are you going to try and play him again for it?”, “No, I’ll just steal it,”. hahahaha. I love that! So funny. Again, only fine-tooth comb type things wrong with this. Like when Duke says '“Yeah! The chick might come with him actually. I forget her name.' You should add a closing quotation mark. And where they're talking about Duke's car and the guard should "He’s bond to keep" be 'He's bound to keep'? She finds she has all the power, then she just HAS to remember that she's not Madam Lulu... sigh Ah, your writing is so funny, I really like it. Interesting twist, to have the car stolen. Can't wait to read more! Review Marathon, in the Review Game Forum. Link in my profile ~Caecilia
Caecilia Bellz 2008-07-19 ch 4,	I think the only problem I'm finding as I'm reading this is that there are some spelling errors, or words that might be added, just to make reading smoother. You might want to go over with a fine-tooth comb, not only spell-check, because spell-check can miss things. Like " stomach twist under my tub dress." Should probably be "under my tube dress". Also, "the long hall" should be "the long haul". Also, in "I was supposed to fane being a part of" the "fane" should be changed to feign. This is getting pretty good. Lucy is a funny character, and I look forward to reading more of this story. It's good and funny, but you should probably go over it again. Review Marathon, in the Review Game Forum. Link in my profile ~Caecilia
Caecilia Bellz 2008-07-19 ch 3,	I liked Felicia's suggestion in the last chap, but it's definitely not big enough. Again, your writing is funny, even though such bad things are happening to Lucy. Not much to complain about, except, in the beginning when it says "this was a thrown gantlet" should be "this was a thrown gauntlet" I really adore how you describe Sebastian, I can understand why she'd be willing to work this job. Not only does she get to get revenge on Paul (and he'll hopefully stop tormenting her), she also gets to work with Sebastian, yummy. Good writing, can't wait to see more. Review Marathon, in the Review Game Forum. Link in my profile ~Caecilia

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