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| Love in Light 2007-03-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseI thought the art behind this was mediocre. It didn't rhyme, and had no rhythm. I don't mean that as an insult; it just is a fact. I did, however, like the imagery of a shattered world and heart. Beyond the art of this, I loved it. The emotions are very real. I mean, now I'm going to sit and talk about my life (because I'm egocentric), but this is how I feel right now. Without the author's note it wouldn't have been the same. Once a guy shatters your world, you know never to put it back into his hands. (What's really amusing is when said guy doesn't realize what he's done.) In the end, I suppose it's better that way - like you say, don't fall for that again. I know that I personally am happier without the guy who actually pretended to like me in return... it's nice not to worry about stuff like that. But deep inside, there's always a feeling of loss, that time can whittle down. But it's always there. This poem reflected that feeling, and the author's note reflected the duality. I loved the combination of the two. Bravo, and encore. |