You captured reality beautifully.

hmm...nice, i like the writing style. yay!^^ guess what going in to my favs!XD

haha.. very powerful style-wise.. i agree with the previous reviewer.. maybe use a different word other than apperception.. i doubt that the people targeted by this poem knows the meaning of apperception (i know i don't) until i asked you of course.. hehe

-keep it

I like this...the style of having the different viewpoints switch around is original and works well. Overall it's pretty cool (i'm sorry I can't think of a better adjective right now...)

My one criticism is that "the girl's apperception," "The boy's apperception," etc sounds too long/complicated. Although you might lose some of your intended meaning by substituting "apperception" with "perception," I think it would make the poem flow better.