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| simpleplan13 2007-04-16 ch 1,   | interesting metaphor... I like it a lot. |
| yui ikari 2007-03-26 ch 1, | This is nice. |
| B.S. Ha 2007-03-23 ch 1, | I think this is pretty good, except for maybe some punctuation? It's a sad thing how short haikus are, but they are what they are. Good job, ~foretpsych |
| Midnight In Eden 2007-03-22 ch 1, | I think a touch of punctuation would really help the flow and emphasis of this. Otherwise, a good little haiku. .:midnight:. |