Damn, I didn't know that you can't include links in reviews. It makes sense, come to think about it, but anyway, hang on:

http: // w. bobbrooke .com / WritersCorner / paragraphswhentouse .htm

If you remove the spaces, then it'll show you where I got the info from, incase there's some other stuff on the site which you possibly could find useful, I'm not sure.

I loved the prologue, by the way, even if that first paragraph was a bit large. I can't congratulate you enough on resisting the urge to type out some long and boring history of the universe you've created. wonderful!

However, when clicked onto the next chapter, what faced me was a terrifying mass of words. I beg you to go back and split it up into proper paragraphs so that I can read and enjoy your story! It looks like it's going to be so good! Do this and I'll adore you: if not forever, then a reasonably long amount of time.

In fact, I'll even do some grammar research on exactly when you should create a new paragraph, just in case you're not sure. I've googled it, and got the following from

PARAGRAPHS AND WHEN TO USE THEM
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Many people never learned how and when to use paragraphs. Most likely they learned that every paragraph should have a topic sentence, but that's where their knowledge of paragraphing stops. Below are some guidelines on when to create a new paragraph and their uses.

PARAGRAPHS ARE UNITS OF COMPOSITION. They help you organize your ideas so that they flow freely from one to the other.

Change paragraphs:

1. At a change of place.
2. At a change of time.
3. To show a specific case as related to your topic.
4. To change to a more specific time.
5. When the speaker changes.

Different paragraphs do different things.

1. Opening and closing.
2. Find subdivisions in your topic.
3. Provides support for your ideas.

EACH PARAGRAPH MUST HAVE A TOPIC SENTENCE--one that states its purpose.

1. Control the length of each paragraph by making it just long enough to support and develop the controlling idea.

2. Try to limit your paragraph to five lines--not sentences. If it's too long, break it down into a series of paragraphs on subtopics.

3. Vary paragraph length. A series of short paragraphs can emphasize a point.

4. Use one-sentence paragraphs to emphasize a point.

PARAGRAPHS ALLOW YOU TO:

1. Control your ideas.
2. Provide concrete examples, reasons and illustrations.
3. Comment on your ideas--give your opinion.
4. State your main point again in other ways.
5. Summarize for other people by stating what you believe or what you learned.
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I wasn't sure what to include, so I decided on all of it. I hope it helps!