Reviews for The Heaven I Found in Hell

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book.babe15 2008-11-09 ch 25,	so cute! loved it!
bethel-babe 2008-09-27 ch 25,	so sweet!
bethel-babe 2008-09-27 ch 18,	the last line was funny. haha.
bethel-babe 2008-09-26 ch 14,	friggin' 800 dollar bag!? wtf!?
bethel-babe 2008-09-26 ch 12,	YESS! Alex now knows that Nathan likes her! finally, but looks like it's not working out... really good chapter! love it!
bethel-babe 2008-09-25 ch 11,	holy shoot! that is so sweet! i love it when things like that happens. Nathan and Alex... aww... so cute! and the ball!
I Murder on Impulse 2008-09-21 ch 18,	BRILLIANT STORY! XX
jekodama 2008-08-21 ch 2,	Why would she run to a place she doesn't want to be? I honestly thought she would fight more. Grammar and spelling check are in order, because there are sentences that drag endlessly, typos, and just weird sentences around. And at some parts you even change the characters' names. Also, you give out too many details, and rob us the chance to imagine the things our way. I suppose you want us to get a picture of what you are imagining the scene to be, but if you give to many details, we get bored. That's why I loved Harry Potter books so much, because there was enough for the readers to recreate the scene in their minds, but not enough to saturate us, and that, my dear, is achieved with practice. Keep writing! Toodles!
jekodama 2008-08-19 ch 1,	That was an interesting prologue, and I'm impressed by the topic you're dealing with. Eating disorders are a sensitive subject for a lot of people, and I'm intrigued whether or not you're going to use the topic a lot in the story. The description of the runway scene was excellent, and the whole tone of the conversation between Alex and her parents was very realistic, although I think that the father could be a little more defined, he was a very flat character in this first chapter, which I think is okay, since it is just the first chapter anyway. A grammar/spelling check wouldn't hurt, and I'm definitely reading more.
envirofriendlykrissooo 2008-08-16 ch 6,	This just keeps getting more and more interesting! Now the other characters are starting to make more of an impression too. Great job with the plotline. I can kind of guess where it's going to be headed, but from what I've read you sure are good at throwing in little twists to keep it interesting. So I'm sure I'll be suprised. And I really loved the "intervention" scene. It raises alot of moral conflictions. Good work.
xxx.You.Know.You.Love.Me.xx... 2008-08-07 ch 25,	LOVE IT! Since you are done there is not much more to say lmao but really it was a great story. So cliche yet un-cliche lol. I could call it a cliche with a twist. Lol
envirofriendlykrissooo 2008-07-31 ch 4,	Well well, from what I've read so far this is coming along quite nicely. I love how from the very start of her arrival Riley and Nathan make her seem so welcome. Way to get into a good friendship. I think you did good expressing Cindy's character. She seems so much like a real person, it's almost creepy. This goes for Nathan too. Already we can tell he's honest and sincere. I look forward to learning more about you're other characters. I'll have to read more later.
envirofriendlykrissooo 2008-07-31 ch 1,	Ha ha, what could be boring about a friendly mother-daughter shouting contest? Teehee... The beginning description of the runway was great, the imagery was perfect. With that, I only spotted a couple mistakes. - "waiting to walk on the white platform I had just strttued"- Well, um. I bet you can spot the typo. Nothing major. - "don't humiliate yourself and the family name. You hear, me?"- The comma after 'you hear' seems unnecissary. Those were just two among a few others. They weren't enough to detract from the overall quality of the story, I definitely like the start, don't get me wrong. It was enough however to throw me off for a second, a speed bump, if you will. I might add the mother-daughter argument was very realistic. It was a nice introduction for Alexandria's character. I'm definitely reading more.
faithful.dream 2008-07-07 ch 25,	i LOVE your stories, this one is SUPER cute
xHopeLesSdReaMeRx 2008-07-05 ch 25,	wow!! it's so so cute.. and nice.. and everything.. i love it! :)

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