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Bloodfeeder 2008-11-09 ch 23,	aw. so sad. I hope they find each other again. Lee
xXxDemi-DemonxXx 2008-08-19 ch 21,	cries omg...I must say that I think Lacomb is a bastard. He could have at least given him a piece of candy. And to steal the ring like that...he's only a kid, anyways, he shouldn't have to suffer in that hellhole...I would open the grate! sniffles
True.Randomness 2008-02-13 ch 21,	This story reminds me so much of the Nazi and the Jews. I am sure if your are using the same style to write all of your big stories like this now, but just to let you know for this story it worked. Though the scence were short, they left a big inpact in one's mind. The story is sad, but at the same time enlightening since it shows how we let the masses and ignorance cloud our minds and how we let fear and cowardiness stop us from doing the right thing. However I found the ending to be more conforting, since it lead to believe that maybe the wrong would be made right again. I was a simple yet deep story, one to remember.
writtenbyrandom 2007-12-07 ch 21,	Oh, now that's just not fair. You have to update now!
writtenbyrandom 2007-12-07 ch 10,	Hi, I'm not sure if you remember me but you reviewed my story on LJ and then gave me a link to your work, which I FINALLY got the chance to check out a little. I know I'm only about halfway through this story, but I thought I would go ahead and review just in case I don't get a chance to finish this today. Plus, there was something in this particular chapter that I wanted to point out. So far, the story has been very intriguing. Though the descriptions have been sparse so far you've created a world that is believeable enough. I especially loved your use of the word 'ostensible' a few chapters back to describe the way Lacomb was speaking the general truths of the public, haha. I don't think there is a more perfect word. On the other hand, sometimes the description can be a little too sparse, and leaves me wanting. For example, though this chapter is very powerful in how Talen plays dead and lets someone else take his place, I feel if you gave just a little more description on what's going on around him, it would really make the scene stand out more. Like for instance, if you wrote the reactions of the other Crissons in the chamber around him, or gave the sacrificed boy more life-- Talen's stuck in these sewers with these people, he must know them a little, at least in passing, right? Maybe he recognizes the voice of the boy that was taken in his stead. Or is the place so vast, it's too hard to know anyone? I'm just thinking off the top of my head here. All in all, however, good story. Reading onward!
merrymowmow 2007-11-25 ch 21,	I was wondering when you're going to update?
merrymowmow 2007-09-08 ch 14,	I was wondering when you're going to update?
your-blood-my-fingertips 2007-05-28 ch 6,	Wow. This is an amazing piece of writing... I likes very much. Very good comment on society, and an awesome allegory :] keep updating! xox
Sadwyn 2007-04-07 ch 2,	This seems like a good beginning. I am curious to read more.
callise 2007-03-25 ch 1,	um wow that is really short...it's short... anyway, just to make sure I understand. Its a large cell and if you stay the fartherest away you wont get picked? it seems interest, its just so short I dont have enough to decide on...if that makes sense...
Milo Jules 2007-03-25 ch 1,	blinks I hope I'm supposed to want to torture and then hang the guards with piano wire before handing them over to Elwood because that is exactly what I want to do. stabs them [Good use of dialect (and dialogue in general) by the way. ^^]

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