This poem was a little too much like your other love poem. The part with the lips, I'd heard before, just formulated differently. One thing I liked about this poem was the last verse. "For you to smile - I would gladly kill." That was a thought put into wrds that I hadn't heard in your last poem. In that part, you made it so clear how much that woman means to you, in a very powerful way.
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