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| Orual 2007-04-07 ch 1,   | I'm...not quite sure what just happened. I'm fascinated, but I'm not sure. My first impulse was that the man (the dead Lazarus, I assume) was a vampire, but I'm not sure. I think that if you changed your formatting a little, it might be clearer. A divider between author's note and the text, and single spacing in lyrics would help (You can single space by holding down 'shift' and hitting 'enter.') And continue the story, if there's more to tell. :) |